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my VOYAGER spec script, part 2

February 14th, 2008 (07:49 am)

Here's the conclusion of my VOYAGER spec, as submitted to Trek in 1999. As mentioned in the previous post, the whole script exceeded LJ's appetite, so I've posted it in two chunks. Part one is here. Commentary is forthcoming (probably tonight or tomorrow morning).





                              ACT FOUR

FADE IN:

INT - JANEWAY'S READY ROOM

Tuvok and Janeway are entering.

                    JANEWAY
          All right, Tuvok, you've got me.  
          What is it?

Janeway sits behind her desk.

                    TUVOK
           I am not sure.
             (beat)
          An anomaly.  Perhaps nothing. But... it
          troubles me.

Janeway raises an eyebrow as he passes her a PADD.

                    JANEWAY
          Must be one hell of an --
             (beat; hushed)
          You've verified these?

                    TUVOK
          Lieutenant Torres has run several diagnostics.  
          We find no evidence of a malfunction.

                    JANEWAY
          That's impossible.
             (beat)
          We can't be burning this much on replicators.  
          Unless half the crew decided to blow their replicator
          rations over the past two days.

                    TUVOK
          That is the most logical explanation.

                    JANEWAY
          There's nothing logical about it.
             (beat)
          All right; assume that my sarcastic hypothesis 
          is correct.  Why?

                    TUVOK
          I do not know.

                    JANEWAY
             (beat)
          But you have a suggestion, and I'm not going 
          to like it.  Just spill it.

                    TUVOK
          We should decrypt the replicator logs.

                    JANEWAY
          I was right.  I don't like it.

                    TUVOK
          I know the step is unusual.

                    JANEWAY
          It's an extreme invasion of the crew's 
          privacy.  Doesn't that concern you?

                    TUVOK
          In light of recent events, this anomaly concerns 
          me.  Particularly the discrepancy between energy 
          consumed and mass created.

                    JANEWAY
          Power cells are used in a lot of things, Tuvok.  
          Scanners, peephole holos --

                    TUVOK
          -- handheld phasers.
             (beat)
          I know you do not wish to consider it.  But 
          Chakotay's services are creating tension on 
          the ship.  We should be prepared for every 
          eventuality.

                    JANEWAY
             (beat)
          Have you examined personal energy consumption?

                    TUVOK
          I do not have the required clearance.

                    JANEWAY
          I do.

She presses buttons on a PADD.  Reads, hands it to Tuvok.

                    JANEWAY
          Look at that.
             (hands PADD over)
          The correlation between above-normal energy 
          use, and the crew who signed Chakotay's petition.

                    TUVOK
          I see no correlation.

                    JANEWAY
             (mildly)
          Curious, isn't it?

Tuvok gets it.

                    TUVOK
          That does cast doubt on my doomsday scenario.

Tuvok hands back the PADD.

                    JANEWAY
          Keep your eyes open.

Exit Tuvok.  Janeway picks up the PADD and studies it.  Frowns.

INT - TURBOLIFT / GENERIC CORRIDOR

Janeway is in the lift.  Chakotay, in civvies, enters.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Deck seven.

The lift is underway.  Janeway checks out Chakotay's threads.

                    JANEWAY
          Commander.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Captain.

                    JANEWAY
          Ensign Egolf's party?

                    CHAKOTAY
          Seven told me.

                    JANEWAY
          I've never been comfortable at subordinates' 
          private parties.  Benefits of a Starfleet 
          education.
             (beat)
          How are the services?

                    CHAKOTAY
          The holodeck's working out fine.

                    JANEWAY
          And just think -- some cynics thought you 
          were trying to use it as a bargaining chip.  
          Rubbing my nose in what you consider a bad
          decision.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Tuvok?

                    JANEWAY
          Tuvok.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Tuvok.

                    JANEWAY
          Incidentally, we’ll be making some repairs 
          to the holodeck.

                    CHAKOTAY
          You don’t say?

                    JANEWAY
          They’re long overdue.  And it’ll only be 
          a few days.

                    CHAKOTAY
          And where do we go?  A broom closet?  Maybe 
          next to a turbolift shaft?  The background 
          noise would be soothing --

                    JANEWAY
          I was thinking Hydroponics.
             (beat)
          It’s peaceful.  Spacious.  Green.  And in the 
          evening, it is unused.  Who knows?  You might 
          want to move there permanently.  Just to dispel 
          those nasty rumors.

The elevator halts.  Doors open.

Chakotay knows he's been outplayed.

                    CHAKOTAY
          I can't slip anything past you, can I?

                    JANEWAY
          Nope.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Just checking.

Exit Chakotay.

                    JANEWAY
             (after him)
          Nice civvies.

The door closes and she's gone.

INT - EGOLF'S QUARTERS

ENSIGN LEVESQUE, seated at a table, is making out with a STARFLEET
CUTIE.  Each of them has a hand on their own hallucinatron.  Harry Kim
watches them with some puzzlement.

Tom leans over Harry's shoulder, whispers in his ear.

                    TOM
          It's a fad.

He walks off, Harry follows.

As we go with them through the party, we see people chatting, laughing
-- and sitting around in small groups, their hands on hallucinatrons. 
Yes, that's plural.  Now we understand why the replicator usage was so
increased: the little devices have been reproducing like tribbles on
Spanish Fly.


                    HARRY
          You really think so?

                    TOM
          Whatever that little box can do, a holodeck
          can do better.  We get back to the Alpha 
          Quadrant, those things are gone.
             (about to exit)
          This isn't my scene.  You?

Harry spies Seven of Nine entering the party.

                    HARRY
          I think I'll stick around.

SEVEN OF NINE walks around the party, examining the various and sundry
people tripping out.  Harry approaches, holding a newly-acquired plate
of mini-cheesecakes, offers her one, which she takes and examines.

                    HARRY
          I haven't seen you around.  Have 
          you been busy?

                    SEVEN
          I have been occupied with a new 
          experiment.

                    HARRY
             (re: party)
          Pretty wild, huh?  Look at Arthur. 
          Who'd've thought he'd go in for 
          hallucinations?

                    SEVEN
          He was once addicted to the Jewels 
          of Sound.

                    HARRY
          Where'd you get that?

                    SEVEN
          His personnel file.

                    HARRY
          Seven, those are restricted.

                    SEVEN
          You said yourself, I lack the human 
          perspective.  What I cannot understand, 
          I must interpret from the actions of others.

Harry's starting to understand now, and he's getting more creeped out by
the second.

                    HARRY
          Your experiment?  You're using Arthur 
          as a lab rat?!

                    SEVEN
          Ensign Levesque is not the subject 
          of my experiment.

                    HARRY
          Then who --

Seven points OS.  Harry’s gaze follows.

Chakotay has just entered the party.

BACK TO HARRY, who looks at Seven, aghast.  Seven picks up a
mini-cheesecake from the plate and has a nibble.

                    SEVEN
          His reaction will be greatly informative.

                    HARRY
             (horrified)
          Jesus Christ!

                    SEVEN
             (blankly)
          Who?

HARRY runs off, plate in hand.  Dodging through the party, he intercepts
Chakotay just inside the door.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Harry.  How's it going?

                    HARRY
          Fine.  Great.  Couldn't be better.  
          Cheesecake?

Chakotay takes one.

                    CHAKOTAY
          That's what I came for.

Harry hands him the plate.

                    HARRY
          Well, here you go.  Thanks for 
          stopping by.

                    CHAKOTAY
          What?

                    HARRY
          Well, I mean, one party, you've 
          seen them all, right?

                    CHAKOTAY
          Harry, I --

                    HARRY
          I need to talk to you.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Can it wait?

                    HARRY
          No.  Now.  Trust me.  Let's go.

He grips Chakotay by the arm and tries to guide him out.  But as they
turn around, Chakotay collides with Janis Montgomery, who's passing. 
The plate of cheesecakes falls to the floor -- and Janis drops her
hallucinatron.

Chakotay bends down to get it.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Ensign Montgomery.  You dropped your --

And he sees what it is.

Shocked, he looks up at Janis, then at Harry.  Then he turns and looks
around the party, which continues unabated.  For the first time,
Chakotay sees all the people tripping.  Treating a part of his
relationship with his gods as a party toy.

His face slides into total horror.

INT - TUVOK'S QUARTERS

Lights are dimmed.  Tuvok, clad in a robe, sits on his couch drinking a
cup of tea.  The doorbell chimes.

                    TUVOK
          Enter.

The door slides open, revealing Chakotay.

                    TUVOK
          Commander?

Chakotay opens his hand.  Electronic bits, the pieces of what was once a
hallucinatron, spill to the floor.  Chakotay is deeply anguished, using
all his will to keep self-control.

                    CHAKOTAY
             (it hurts)
          It was at their party, Tuvok.  They were 
          using it as a toy.
             (beat)
          -- for the gods -- from my father -- and 
          they used it *as a toy --*

Understand: *this is desecration.*

INT - JANEWAY'S QUARTERS

ANGLE: CLOSE ON the bits of hallucinatron, now in a little pile on a
table.  Janeway picks through them, studying.

                    JANEWAY
          I think we've just explained our spike 
          in energy consumption.

WIDER ANGLE reveals Chakotay and Janeway (in her dressing gown) seated
at a table.  Tuvok stands just off to the side.

                    CHAKOTAY
          That's nice.  A mystery's explained.  I'm 
          very pleased. What do we do about it?

                    TUVOK
          From here, it is trivial.  A pattern search 
          of the replicator logs will yield the 
          necessary information.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Like who made the first copy.
             (beat)
          I thought those logs were encrypted.

Tuvok looks at Janeway.  Chakotay's gaze follows his.  Janeway continues
to pick through the bits of hallucinatron.

                    JANEWAY
          Invade the crew's privacy -- again?
             (beat)
          You're developing a real taste for that, 
          Tuvok.  I don't like it.

                    CHAKOTAY
          It doesn't matter if you like it.
             (beat)
          Captain, I understand your reservation.  Ordinarily, 
          I’d share it.  But somebody copied this without my 
          permission.  And that is theft.

                    JANEWAY
          "That" is a Wah Chang series neural stimulator.

                    CHAKOTAY
          ...what?

                    JANEWAY
          It’s a medical diagnostic tool. Classic.  Sixty 
          years ago, it was Starfleet issue.
             (beat)
          Any design alterations are cosmetic, at best.

                    CHAKOTAY
          What are you saying?

                    JANEWAY
          I'm saying that this technology is 
          in the public domain.

                    TUVOK
           Captain, I urge you to reconsider. 
           If this goes on --

                    JANEWAY
          I'm not going to punish my crew for 
          a crime that hasn't been committed!
             (beat)
          But I cannot let the situation stand as it is.  
          So:  I will put out a request that all existing 
          copies be reclaimed immediately.

                    CHAKOTAY
          A request?  Captain, all due respect -- 
          that's not enough.

                    JANEWAY
          This is a Federation crew.  They'll realize 
          their error if you give them a chance.

                    CHAKOTAY
          They had their chance!

                    JANEWAY
          And they'll have another!  I'm sorry you're 
          hurt, Chakotay.  I am.  But you'll just have 
          to deal with it.

Chakotay gets up.

                    CHAKOTAY
          I will.
             (beat)
          And I'm afraid you will, too.

Exit Chakotay.

Janeway shakes her head, begins to clear away the tea.

ANGLE ON TUVOK shows he is disturbed, as we

                                                            FADE OUT.
                                                            END ACT FOUR.                                                            


                            
                              ACT FIVE

FADE IN:

INT - CHAKOTAY'S QUARTERS

Chakotay is at a communications panel.  BLEEP as the comm is picked up. 
ONSCREEN, Belanna leans into the comm lens.  The room she's in is too
dark to see much more than her dimly-lit face.

                    BELANNA
          Chakotay?

                    CHAKOTAY
          Is this a bad time?

                    BELANNA
          Nah.  Men fall asleep, women wake up.  Ten 
          minutes ago -- that would have been a bad time.
             (then)
          Why are you calling on this thing?

                    CHAKOTAY
          Where's your communicator?

                    BELANNA
             (hasn't a clue)
          Um, I think it's over --  yeah, good point.
             (beat)
          You all right?

                    CHAKOTAY
          How well do you know the replicator system?

                    BELANNA
          Tuvok kept me up half last night running 
          diagnostics on it.  Which is not how I care 
          to lose my sleep, thank you -- hey, do you 
          know what was going on with that?

                    CHAKOTAY
          I need you to decrypt the replicator logs.

Pause.

                    BELANNA
             (beat; puzzled)
          I'd say "pull the other one," but Tom already
          did that.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Can you do it?

                    BELANNA
          Maybe I could get past the preliminary 
          safeguards.  More than that --
             (beat; she shakes her head)
                    
                    CHAKOTAY
          Dammit!
             (beat)
          I'm sorry.  I've had a bitch of a day.

                    BELANNA
             (beat)
          Want to talk about it?

                    CHAKOTAY
             (shakes head)
          I need to handle this myself.  I know 
          that sounds like my ego --

                    BELANNA
          Some things are important that way.
             (beat)
          You want to talk, call me.  Any time.  
          Whatever I'm doing, I'll stop.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Even if I'd called ten minutes ago?

Belanna smiles.  They are old, old friends.

                    BELANNA
          For you?  Yeah.

Chakotay smiles.  He closes the com channel as the DOOR OPENS.  Enter
Tuvok.

                    CHAKOTAY
          You could have rung.

                    TUVOK
          Your doorbell was deactivated.

                    CHAKOTAY
          You could have knocked.

                    TUVOK
          We need to talk.

                    CHAKOTAY
          What about?
             (beat)
          Oh.  I know. Let’s talk about how the Captain 
          can stomach invasion of privacy to uphold 
          Federation atheism, but not to investigate 
          Federation theft.  Somebody thought he was
          stealing from me, but he legally wasn't, so 
          he’s morally in the clear?  Where’s the *logic* 
          in that?

                    TUVOK
          I did not come here to debate you.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Don’t you even tell me it’s to say you’re sorry.

                    TUVOK
          I need your help.
             (off his look)
          We have a common interest.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Somehow I find that extremely unlikely.

                    TUVOK
          We can still defuse this situation.

                    CHAKOTAY
          I think you're underestimating my people.

                    TUVOK
          As you have underestimated mine?

Pause.  Tuvok has Chakotay's attention.

                    TUVOK
          Perhaps obtaining the design was secondary.  
          And stealing it from you was of greater import.  
          What if someone wants to cause this dissent?

                    CHAKOTAY
          You're trying to push my buttons, aren't you?

                    TUVOK
          Is it working?

                    CHAKOTAY
          You need me.  Whatever you have in mind, you 
          can't do it yourself. You have to use me and 
          you don't want to because you still think 
          I was wrong.
             (beat)
          Is that what's going on in that Vulcan skull
          of yours?

Tuvok gives Chakotay a long, cold look.

                    TUVOK
          We wish the same end.  Do you really care why?

Chakotay thinks about it.  Really thinks.

                    CHAKOTAY
             (beat)
          No.
             (beat)
          What do you have in mind?

INT - SICKBAY

                    DOCTOR
          You want me to what?

WIDER ANGLE reveals that Chakotay is alone with the Doctor.

                    CHAKOTAY
          It's been done before.  Ever look up the 
          Enterprise-D?  Butt of a thousand Maquis jokes?  
          Their holodeck turned on them every week?

                    DOCTOR
          Of course I can do it.  That's not the point.

The Doctor moves away, resumes his work.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Then what is?

                    DOCTOR
          Just because something can be done doesn't 
          mean it should.

                    CHAKOTAY
          There's someone on this ship who needs to hear 
          that more than I do.

                    DOCTOR
             (meaning Tuvok)
          Don't I know it.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Forget Tuvok for a minute.  Listen to me.  
          They could have copied the old Federation 
          design. They didn't.  Somebody wanted to hurt me.

                    DOCTOR
          I hardly think --

                    CHAKOTAY
          Maybe it wasn’t me.  My classes were growing.  
          Maybe that frightened someone --

The Doctor is suddenly very concerned.

                    DOCTOR
          Is there talk of violence?

                    CHAKOTAY
          Now you sound like Tuvok.
             (beat)
          That's all he thinks about.  If you give this 
          time, it could blow up.  People might, gods forbid,
          argue about something. But that's not my problem!
             (beat)
          All I know is that someone took something that 
          means everything to me and used it as a toy.  And 
          that is wrong.
             (beat, intense)
          Doctor, please... help me.

INT - CORRIDOR/SICKBAY

Chakotay exits from sickbay and blows by Tuvok, who is waiting in the
hall.  Tuvok follows.

                    TUVOK
          Did he cooperate?

                    CHAKOTAY
          Yep.

                    TUVOK
          What is our destination?

                    CHAKOTAY
          I'll handle it, Tuvok.

Tuvok nods.  Moves to accompany Chakotay down the hall.  Chakotay puts a
hand on Tuvok's shoulder, stops him.

                    CHAKOTAY
             (gently, but with feeling)
          I said, I'll handle it.

Chakotay steps away.  Tuvok turns around, encounters the Doctor, who's
now wearing his mobile emitter.

                    DOCTOR
           You did well coaching him.

                    TUVOK
           How --

                    DOCTOR
          Decrypting replicator logs, accessing 
          internal sensors, sniffing out snooping 
          Vulcans... it’s all information, Tuvok.

                    TUVOK
          Logical.

                    DOCTOR
          And potentially extremely entertaining.  
          For me.  Though if I were you, I'd keep my 
          sonic shower on "low" for the next week.

                    TUVOK
          I will bear that in mind.

Tuvok turns to exit.

                    DOCTOR
          Do you know the amusing part?  Not that 
          you'd appreciate it, of course.
             (off Tuvok's look)
          I didn't decrypt the logs because I thought
          Chakotay was right.  I did it because I 
          thought you were.

INT - TURBOLIFT / GENERIC CORRIDOR

The turbolift door opens, revealing Levesque.

A long, cold stare later, Chakotay gets in.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Deck [X].

The lift is underway.

Levesque looks up at Chakotay, who does not look back at him.  Levesque
is beneath his notice.  The silence is tremendously uncomfortable.

                    LEVESQUE
          I'm sorry.
             (beat)
          About the captain.  Finding out.  She
          wouldn't have, if Harry and I hadn't --
             (beat)
          I'm sorry.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Is that all you're sorry for?

Levesque is cowed.

The turbolift doors open.  Chakotay exits.  Levesque holds a moment,
then follows him.

                    CHAKOTAY
          I have somewhere to go.  I think 
          you know that.

                    LEVESQUE
          I only made a few copies.  I didn't 
          think you'd be so upset.

Pause.

                    CHAKOTAY
          You didn't think --

He advances on Levesque now, his bulk imposing.

                    LEVESQUE
          No.  I swear I didn't --

                    CHAKOTAY
          And what exactly were you thinking?

                    LEVESQUE
          I don't know.  I just --

                    CHAKOTAY
          You just.  You just what?

                    LEVESQUE
          I didn't know why you'd mind!

Chakotay pulls back.

                    LEVESQUE
          You're Maquis.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Prick us.  We bleed.

                    LEVESQUE
          But I thought --  all that individual 
          freedom stuff --

                    CHAKOTAY
          Freedom means being responsible, Levesque.  
          You have a right to swing your fist, but you 
          can't swing it if you'll hurt people!

                    LEVESQUE
          Like you hurt me?
             (beat)
          Like my family on Ezekiel who looked down on me 
          because I wanted to go join the godless Starfleet 
          who'd gotten us to that rock in the first place? 
          Like they hurt me?  You think what we did was like that?

                    CHAKOTAY
          It's not the same.

                    LEVESQUE
          Yeah.  We had a little tact.
             (beat)
          Never mind.  I hurt you, and I'm sorry, and 
          that's all I'm gonna say.
             (beat)
          Go do what you think is right.

Exit Levesque -- and CLOSE ON CHAKOTAY, suddenly drained of his
righteous anger --

INT - SEVEN'S CARGO BAY

Seven is regenerating in her alcove.  THE DOOR OPENS, revealing
Chakotay.  He enters.

He walks in and stands in front of Seven.  Gazes at her a moment.  Her
eyes are closed.

Chakotay turns his head away from Seven, and sees --

A HALLUCINATRON.  On her workstation.

CHAKOTAY strides across the room to the table.  He picks up the
hallucinatron, then walks back to the alcove.  He looks down at the
hallucinatron, then up at Seven.

Her eyes are open.  She is looking back.

Chakotay holds the device up, makes sure he has her attention -- and
then he returns to the workstation and puts it back.  When he has done
so, he turns and walks out of the room without a word.  Seven, not
understanding, looks after him.

INT - CHAKOTAY'S QUARTERS

The room is dark.  Chakotay leans against a telecom monitor.  Janeway
appears onscreen, rubbing sleep from her eyes.

                    JANEWAY
          Chakotay, it's late.
             (beat)
          We've had a strong response.  A number of 
          people have returned their devices and 
          issued apologies.  There's --

                    CHAKOTAY
          Cancel the order.

                    JANEWAY
          What?

                    CHAKOTAY
          Captain, please... just cancel it.

He pushes a button and Janeway blinks off.  Chakotay sags against a wall
for a moment... then gets up and moves away as we go to

INT - HYDROPONICS

Green.  A rich, comfortable green.  There is plenty of space here.

ON CHAKOTAY, drinking it all in.  It'll do.

                    HARRY
             (OS)
          Hi.

Chakotay turns, sees Harry.

                    HARRY
          Computer said you were here.
             (beat)
          Is this okay?

                    CHAKOTAY
          Sure.

                    HARRY
          This is all my --

                    CHAKOTAY
          I'm not angry with you, Harry.

                    HARRY
          I was wrong.

                    CHAKOTAY
          No.  I was.

                    HARRY
          I don't understand.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Maybe we don't have to.
             (beat)
          Not every story comes with a moral.

Pause.

                    HARRY
          Did I tell you that I discovered the 
          secret of life?

                    CHAKOTAY
          No.

                    HARRY
          Wanna hear it?

                    CHAKOTAY
          Yeah. I really do.

                    HARRY
          Okay.
             (beat)
          On any given issue, there'll be two 
          kinds of people.  The people who care one 
          way or another, and the ones who don't.

                    CHAKOTAY
          So?

                    HARRY
          So while the people who really care spend 
          all their time fighting about it, everyone 
          else gets on with their lives.

Chakotay's jaw drops.

                    CHAKOTAY
          Harry, you're a cynic!

                    HARRY
             ("duh")
          I'm an ensign.  What did you expect?

Exit Harry Kim.

Chakotay stands for a moment, thinking about Harry's statement.  He
chuckles, then begins to laugh at himself -- and suddenly, the laughs
turn to sobs.  He sinks to the floor, and sits there, crying.

EXT - SPACE

And Voyager continues on its way.

                                                            FADE OUT.
                                                            END ACT FIVE.
                                                            THE END.