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APED: "today i ate a little man"

February 23rd, 2009 (07:05 pm)

Today I ate a little man
as I was walking down the street.
Open-mouthed, I fell, unplanned.
He went in up to his feet.
And there he stuck. I had to choose:
to take him out or let him stay.
He struggled. And he cursed me, too.
I swallowed so he'd go away.

Now he's here inside my tum.
We go about, this man and I.
It's strange to say: he won't succumb.
I ate him, but he still won't die.
He kicks me hard with little toes.
Hard, and harder every day.
It hurts each time. I wish he'd go.
But it seems he's here to stay.

It's true, I ate the little man.
I erred and so I have to pay.
But now I have a cunning plan
I hope will speed him on his way.
It's coming on. I hope it's soon.
There's just no other way, you know --
You see, I ate six pounds of prunes --
Excuse me, please. I have to go.

Comments

Posted by: leftarrow (leftarrow)
Posted at: February 24th, 2009 12:17 am (UTC)

AAAAAAAAAAHHHH.

So terrible. So cute. So FRIGGING DISGUSTING.

(I can't stop reading your poems?!?!)

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 24th, 2009 11:54 pm (UTC)

THANK YOU AND I'M SORRY.

It's rather surprising to me how many of my poems revolve around eating. The latest involves an emperor who runs away from home and is rescued by a fast-talking dwarf before he can be eaten by a beautiful mercenary.

It's called "The Vore Game."

HERE ALL WEEK TRY THE VEAL

Posted by: Za (iamza)
Posted at: February 24th, 2009 12:25 am (UTC)
reading--livia

Hee!

(I like the rhythm in this poem -- I can hear the words being spoken in a kind of sing-song fashion in my head as I'm reading it).

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 24th, 2009 11:57 pm (UTC)
doc savage python

Thank you! I seem to write poems in a few different ways: sometimes I hear the rhythm first, sometimes I have a refrain, sometimes I have a (usually visual) idea. This one was an idea poem: "Today I ate a little man" seemed like an interesting first line, and the rest came from that. I think the rest came out of the rhythm that line established, though, if that makes sense.

Posted by: Za (iamza)
Posted at: February 25th, 2009 12:39 am (UTC)
cm; reid effect--briecheesie

It does.

And it is a great first line for the poem -- it certainly caught my attention, and the rhythm did the rest.

Posted by: A large duck (burger_eater)
Posted at: February 24th, 2009 05:43 am (UTC)

Hee.

I don't always have time to comment, but I am enjoying these.

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 24th, 2009 11:58 pm (UTC)
bruce and diana

I am glad! I never figured everybody would comment on every one, so no worries there.

(Lookin' forward to the book, BTW.)

Posted by: A large duck (burger_eater)
Posted at: February 25th, 2009 12:32 am (UTC)

Thanks!

Posted by: Piglet (porcinea)
Posted at: February 24th, 2009 06:32 pm (UTC)

Thank you for these! I fall over laughing (or recoil in horror!) every day now.

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 24th, 2009 11:58 pm (UTC)

Glad to be of assistance!

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