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APED: "trading secrets"

February 2nd, 2009 (06:01 am)

You've gotten a couple years older.
You've gotten more careful since then.
Since then you've looked over your shoulder.
And since then you've not trusted men.
He said that he'd own you forever. He'd kidnap you. Make you his wife.
So you moved, so you hid. It's a wise thing you did.
You worried he might take your life.
Flat tires. Dead cats. He got bolder.
You'd thought once that he was your friend.
But you came to this faraway city
so you'd never see him again.

He worshipped the ground that you walked on.
Who thought he'd be something to fear?
But something about you, he locked on --
Well, you've made a new life, out here.
You've never told this little secret. You don't feel safe, and so you pretend.
I'm honored to see how much you've trusted me
When you thought that you couldn't again.
It must be a hard life. Hard just to be,
when you're scared what you might wake to hear.
His fat, fleshy hands are a chill memory.
His high tenor rings in your ear.

But the surgery had one objective:
to erase that sad creature I'd been.
An acting class, too, was corrective;
a new body language, my end.
For the voice, I gargled weak acid. And I did a couple things more.
I put lifts in my shoes. Lost the weight I could lose.
-- don't bother, dear, I've locked the door.
And you'll find your last drink was effective.
You were right that you shouldn't trust men.
I'm not who I was. But I'm where I should be.
And it's so nice to see you again.

Comments

Posted by: Petra (petronelle)
Posted at: February 2nd, 2009 11:24 am (UTC)

*AUGH.* Happy Monday morning to you, too.

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 2nd, 2009 11:18 pm (UTC)
oh john ringo no

Yeah, I'm gonna be making this one up to people all week.

Posted by: peeps wanna see peeps boink (musesfool)
Posted at: February 2nd, 2009 05:26 pm (UTC)
danger

Eek!

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 2nd, 2009 11:19 pm (UTC)
cameron's head

You and me both. I can't quite believe I actually wrote that.

Posted by: Not your everyday Viking angel (shadowvalkyrie)
Posted at: February 2nd, 2009 07:17 pm (UTC)
excused from saving universes

Eeeep! No!

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 2nd, 2009 11:21 pm (UTC)
plane

I know exactly how you feel.

Posted by: Vvalkyri (vvalkyri)
Posted at: February 2nd, 2009 07:41 pm (UTC)

AAaagh. I did /not/ see that coming.
Horror in rhyme. sheesh.

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 2nd, 2009 11:22 pm (UTC)

Yeah. I think I'll lighten up some the rest of this week.

Posted by: Caius (caiusmajor)
Posted at: February 3rd, 2009 12:01 am (UTC)
Gabe Jones: backwarmer

...I pretty much knew that, or something of the sort, was coming, but AWGH. *shudders*

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 3rd, 2009 02:22 am (UTC)
catwoman and holly

Yeah. Um. SORRY.

Posted by: amonitrate (amonitrate)
Posted at: February 3rd, 2009 02:17 am (UTC)

oh wow, this is incredibly creepy. just really fucking creepy.

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 3rd, 2009 02:25 am (UTC)
wtf

Yeah. This is the first thing I've ever written that has freaked the hell out of me.

Posted by: DarkMark (darkmark)
Posted at: February 3rd, 2009 06:04 am (UTC)

Hey, I liked this!

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 4th, 2009 03:15 am (UTC)
catwoman and holly

It works, sure, but gahhhhh. I am glad you liked it -- it's good to know that it's not only causing massive amounts of trauma.

Posted by: DarkMark (darkmark)
Posted at: February 4th, 2009 07:35 am (UTC)

Nah. I thought it was clever. ;-) Heh-heh-heh.

Posted by: Elleria (elleria)
Posted at: February 3rd, 2009 06:25 am (UTC)

I am not going to sleep tonight now... Nah, I will anyway, I'll just go read some Order of the Stick and I'll be fine.
This is good, creepy as all hell, but very good.

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 4th, 2009 03:17 am (UTC)

Ooh, that reminds me, I need to catch up on OotS. Thanks!

Posted by: tried to eat the safe banana (thefourthvine)
Posted at: February 3rd, 2009 08:27 pm (UTC)
All the bees are ded.

*hides*

David Hines: writer of poetry that needs a rating and WARNINGS.

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 6th, 2009 09:13 pm (UTC)
commies

YOU'RE TELLING ME.

I had this thing settle in my head. Freaked me the hell out, I tell you.

Posted by: poemsfromgod.blogspot.com (ext_144224)
Posted at: February 5th, 2009 01:40 am (UTC)

We should know by now you like evil twists. It explains your Ringo love/hate connection.

Good poetry should surprise you. This poem leaps out and slashes you. It's painful. We have been lured, like her, on "false" pretenses.

- Presbypoet

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 6th, 2009 09:17 pm (UTC)

We should know by now you like evil twists.

You should! :) What I really like, I think, is *development;* I want my poems to end up in a different place than they started in. Which is what I want my stories to do, come to think of it; I think I approach them in similar ways.

Posted by: •• the years oƒ living ∂angerously happy •• (nightengale)
Posted at: February 6th, 2009 11:53 pm (UTC)
!no!

jesus christ.

You really have a talent for this, oh my GOD. *shudders*

Posted by: David Hines (hradzka)
Posted at: February 9th, 2009 10:00 pm (UTC)
wtf

I. Yeah, I really got nothin' here.

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