APED: "i noticed something about free verse"

March 11th, 2009 (08:51 pm)

i noticed something
about free verse
lots of it is really passive-aggressive

you hurt me
you didn't love me
you made me sad

like that

except
they never say who "you" is
wusses

hey ian
yeah you
the guy who always got all the other kids to gang up on me in snowball fights when we were six
about your wife

i shtupped her

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Posted by: cyano (

cyano)

Posted at: March 12th, 2009 01:17 am (UTC)

*dies lauging*

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Posted by: David Hines (

hradzka)

Posted at: March 25th, 2009 12:24 am (UTC)

*bows*

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Posted by: kdorian (

kdorian)

Posted at: March 12th, 2009 01:29 am (UTC)

I ADORE you.

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Posted by: David Hines (

hradzka)

Posted at: March 25th, 2009 12:24 am (UTC)

I am pleased to be adored!

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Posted by: Caius (

caiusmajor)

Posted at: March 12th, 2009 02:07 am (UTC)

Okay, that's AMAZING.

Even if it doesn't rhyme or have capital letters.

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Posted by: David Hines (

hradzka)

Posted at: March 25th, 2009 12:25 am (UTC)

not rhyming or having capital letters
is what makes free verse awesome
ask anyone

also it doesn't matter if your shift key is broken

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Posted by: a.r. mouse (

arabidmouse)

Posted at: March 12th, 2009 02:12 am (UTC)

Lol, freakin' awesome.

It is also a good observation. I write free verse and I always write about "you" or "he" or "she." I may have to try breaking out of that rut.

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Posted by: David Hines (

hradzka)

Posted at: March 25th, 2009 12:26 am (UTC)

Thanks! It is a rut easy to fall into.

Ruts are odd things. When I started, I wrote rhyming couplets as a default setting. Now it's quatrains, so I'm inclined to break myself of that.

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Posted by: Katie (

dolique)

Posted at: March 12th, 2009 03:00 am (UTC)

i adore this. :D

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Posted by: David Hines (

hradzka)

Posted at: March 25th, 2009 12:27 am (UTC)

I am pleased!

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Posted by: Elspeth (

elspethdixon)

Posted at: March 12th, 2009 03:11 am (UTC)

*laughs* If I had ten bucks for every passive aggressive "an unspecified person has caused me pain" poen I had to read in an undergraduate creative writing workshop, I could probably pay off my student loans with it.

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Posted by: David Hines (

hradzka)

Posted at: March 25th, 2009 12:28 am (UTC)

You could probably pay off the stimulus package and the bailouts with it.

(I like "an unspecified person has caused me pain" as the first line in a free verse poem. Really a lot actually.

an unspecified person has caused me pain
over something
done or undone

i'm not saying who or what

maybe it was you

think about it)

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Posted by: kdorian (

kdorian)

Posted at: March 25th, 2009 01:32 am (UTC)

I think you've taken passive-aggressive to new heights! :D

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Posted by: Katie (

dolique)

Posted at: March 25th, 2009 02:58 am (UTC)

oh man, the additional bits in the comments are the icing on an already fabulous cake. *gleeface*

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