?

Log in

No account? Create an account
David Hines [userpic]

APED: "aww, kitty free verse"

August 17th, 2009 (09:44 pm)

Another in my occasional efforts to write free verse that doesn't suck. This is difficult, because free verse carries a fair amount of intrinsic suckage by its very nature.

Watch out for the small cat
waiting at the end of the hall
he lies on curled on his side
the sun warm on his fur
and dreams of his ancestors
who were tigers
and when he wakes up and sees you
his first thought
is "the blood would taste so good"

Comments

Posted by: mendori (mendori)
Posted at: August 18th, 2009 05:09 am (UTC)

This is the truth. In free verse. Living with a cat with thumbs has taught me that YES, given the right amount of time, cats will in fact complete their enslavement of the human race. This is also why I feed my cats dry food - I really don't ever want to see the day my cats figure out the pop top cans.

Posted by: DarkMark (darkmark)
Posted at: August 18th, 2009 05:15 am (UTC)

And his second is, "But who'd get me my Fancy Feast?"

Posted by: Aiglet (aiglet)
Posted at: August 18th, 2009 01:29 pm (UTC)

I think this is way too linear for good free verse -- maybe it needs some figs?

Posted by: brewsternorth (brewsternorth)
Posted at: August 18th, 2009 02:25 pm (UTC)
*lol*

Having been nibbled upon by one of my cats yesterday (he didn't draw blood, but he might've done), that's a very accurate verse.

4 Read Comments